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Post by Yuumagure on Nov 12, 2009 2:08:13 GMT -6
Name: Yuumagure Kyoushu
Age: 17
Birthday: August 8
Birthplace: (Will do later)
Sex: Male
Personality: Excited about human contact, though gets exhausted by others easily.
History: Simple Carpenter that lives in the woods. The real story comes when The Composer stops being a douchebag and lets me put my real profile up XD
Powers: WTF!?
Occupation: Freelance Fixer
Mercenary job title: No Combat ranking
Appearance:
Black Hair
Bark brown/Black Eyes
5'6
125 pounds
Prefers light clothes like cloth
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Keiji
Leader
The Keiji B (KGB) is coming for you...
Posts: 49
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Post by Keiji on Nov 12, 2009 23:51:37 GMT -6
I'm going to be brutally honest. I cannot allow this profile as it is.
Rejected.
I have several problems with this profile:
Your personality is incredibly short. We here at Decisive Revolution expect paragraphs of you. In order to prove that you are capable of roleplaying in paragraph form, we require that you prove it in your application. If you would like guidelines to assist you in lengthening your application, please read over the applications for Jaaku and Malory. The problem with your application is much the same as theirs.
The same thing applies to both your history and your appearance. Firstly, for appearance, if you do not feel like writing a descriptive paragraph, please post a picture. Secondly, the history section needs to contain a "complete summary" of your character's history. What was his family life like? How did he end up choosing the life of a carpenter?
Keep at it, I know you can do it!
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